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本文包括四部分：一、優秀英語作文成文；二、與優秀文對比文；三、總結兩種文優缺點；四、英文寫作已知條件

一、優秀英語作文成文：

Dear editor，

I LI Hua as one of readers write you a letter sending you a article on such a “how to understand Chinese-tradition culture” topic as you asked for their comment。 So greatly does it turn people favorable for protecting a variety of Chinese culture that a reader I will be one of its inheritors generation by generation。 This viewpoint I would make known to you as well as all-China people。 By that I am benefiting a lot， in the belief that they shall work hard at doing everything they could， in making China great again throughout a little more than 5000-year history and helping China grow stronger days to come in future。

As shown by this， people are expected to join a highly-cultured activity in protecting traditional culture of China to develop culturally or mentally or intellectually。

Yours， Li Hua

二、與優秀文對比文：

Dear editor，

I‘m writing to you to talk about my opinions about traditional Chinese culture。 I think it’s necessary for us to protect and inherit it。 Here are some reasons。 Firstly， as one of the ancient civilizations in the world， the traditional Chinese culture is the foundation of the development of our country， and it can provide spiritual motivation for Chinese economy。 Secondly， it includes many inspiring and shocking events， through which we can learn some useful things to make our country develop more quickly。 Last but not least， it is an important part of Chinese history， and inheriting it may make us stronger and benefit our growth。 I hope Chinese government and citizens join in the campaign of protecting and inheriting traditional Chinese culture。 We should make contributions and efforts to carry it forward。

Yours， Li Hua

三、總結兩種文優缺點

（一）英語優秀文：寫作內容精細、邏輯思路清晰，相互組合佳；避“跳躍式”思維出現，免缺因少果；寫作過程科學、規範，英文結構完整，審題精準不漏，觀點論據跑不走，邏輯過渡也不丟。

（二）與優秀文對比文：似乎有“面熟”感覺，這樣有“千人一面孔”的特點，如，firstly， secondly， Last but not least。。。。。等；有的句子內容需要改進以及有的句子之間沒有邏輯關聯。對此說明兩點如下：

1。 內容需改進之處，例如：把“I hope Chinese government and citizens join in the campaign of protecting and inheriting traditional Chinese culture。 We should make contributions and efforts to carry it forward。（我希望中國政府和市民加入保護和繼承傳統中國文化運動中來。為推進運動我們作出貢獻和努力。）”，應改進為“我希望在中國政府領導下請市民加入保護和繼承傳統中國文化運動中來（Citizens would be asked to join in the campaign to protect and inherit traditionally Chinese culture under the leadership of Chinese government， I hope）”

2。 英文句子之間由於詞法失誤而導致邏輯關聯性失誤，因此應把：We should make contributions and efforts to carry it forward。改為We should make a contribution to and an effort on the above campaign to carry forward。

（三）大家透過對比兩篇英語作文，細細品味以讓學生知道如何寫出優秀英語作文，達到——提升學生寫作英語能力及其分數。

四、英文寫作已知條件

假定你是李華。最近China Daily就“如何看待中國傳統文化”面向社會徵稿。請你用英語給編輯寫一封信，談談你自己的想法。要點如下： （1）表明自己的立場（傳統文化應該得到保護和傳承）；（2）給出你的理由；（3）呼籲社會共同參與。注意：（1）詞數100左右；（2）可適當增加細節，以使行文連貫；（3）開頭和結尾已給出，不計入總詞數。參考詞彙：傳承 inherit